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Opening Lines

10/1/2019

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The first line of a story and the opening motive in a melody both serve to HOOK the reader or listener into continuing on --- to turn the page, as they say.  I have been attending workshops on writing Picture Books.  Today's subject was about Opening Lines or the first words of the story.  Because I am a musician first, I tend to think in musical terms.  I know that a HOOK is a very powerful melodic phrase where the most important idea or lyric or message of the music is found.  It ultimately should be what the listener goes out of the theater whistling.  In music, the HOOK can be the opening line or it can be the opening line of the refrain.  It just needs to be placed at the most important juncture in the music so that it can make the biggest impact.

In writing a Picture Book, the first line may be the first and only chance to HOOK the reader into wanting to turn the page.  The facilitators gave some guidelines to what a first line should do.

1.  Introduce the main character and establish the VOICE.
2.  Suggest the THEME of the story.
3.  Establish the TONE of the book.
4.  Reveal the CONFLICT.
5.  Set up the STRUCTURE of the book.

Some famous first lines of books that they shared were:
1.  "I'm a bad seed." from The Bad Seed by Jory John
2.  "I just ate my friend." from I Just Ate My Friend by Heidi McKinnon
3.  "On Monday I asked my mother if I could have a dog."  from
      The Best Pet of All by David LaRochelle

They shared a few others, too, and discussed why these were brilliant first lines.  Sometimes the art does a whole lot more to entice the reader to turn the page than just the first line.  But you get the idea of how important the job of these first few words is to introduce the main character, the conflict, the tone of the story and so on.

Now that I have written four Picture Books, I wondered how the first lines of my  stories held up under the 5 criteria mentioned above.

1.  "It all started with the boots." from Is This Cowboy Food?
2.  "When Katelyn was a baby, she only wanted Mom." from Who Will Be My
       Friend?
3.  "Michael was a boy who knew just what he liked." from Too Many Sisters
4.  "Some kids have wooden forts high in the trees.
     Some kids have swings that they sway in the breeze.
" from The Wonderful,
​     
 Marvelous, Magic Bunk Bed

Not too bad. What do you think? I have appreciated comments from friends such as "Your stories are such page turners."  I hope that's true!
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    My name is Betsy Bailey.  I have sung, written and taught music all of my life.  I enjoy writing and directing Children's Theater shows.  This blog will be directed to topics on creating the magic of Children's Theater.  I would love to hear your comments!

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